Dale Dugas wrote:Gary,
http://www.bullshido.net/forums/showthread.php?t=117840
you want to drive some traffic to your site.
Dale Dugas wrote: offense but what is your background?
Dale Dugas wrote: lineage is not listed but you want people to shell out money for material that is extremely questionable.
Dale Dugas wrote: the past I bought Shifu Marcus Brinkman material from you. That was good material.
Dale Dugas wrote: careful of trying to come across as being better trained than you actually are.
marqs wrote:I liked the video you posted sometime earlier, and also this material looks good, from the substance side.
Some random thoughts when looking at this:
- First page:
• There's a lot of small text. The words "flowing combat" pop out, and then (i guess your) portrait. The small photo is kind of dark and takes a close look to see what's in it.
• What do you really want the 2-3 things people to understand from the first page? I'd be very clear about this and put all the more detailed information behind links. Don't try to tell everything on the first page, just the essentials.
• word "Dim-mak" on the first page might raise some red flags for some people. Be clear about who are your target audience(s) and tailor the message mostly for them on the first page.
• I'd put a video on the first page, that drives the "what is this about" message home. For example just the "2 person drill" part from the video in demos or something. It would be good if the demo would be shot in a setting that looks more "official" - any interior space will probably do, some people in good shape in the background with you teaching something with action that looks gives a representation of the best your system has to offer in your opinion. The clip is meant to give some kind of "Wow"-effect.
• Testimonials are good, I'd put a couple on the first page and then a link to the testimonials-page.
In general:
• Use a bigger font-size
• The header image gets messy with lots of smaller images, Lots of text on top etc. Clarify, which probably means organizing and condensing your message.
• IMO your movement looks good, and you seem to break things down clearly to your student. I'd use the order "first impress then explain how to do it" on the site - as the idea is not to teach, but to give a good impression and spark the interest to study with you, buy the DVD or something like that.
• If you can, get a video clip with better production quality (shot with a better camera/less noise, and some good quality audio makes the video look a lot better.
Good luck with the site & DVD, i hope it works out. I've worked on IT/web projects for a long while, and have BA in arts education + some MA studies in multimedia. So although I'm not a graphic designer, I've studied it along with visual communication etc. My perspective is quite scandinavian which tends to be a lot more minimalistic on the marketing side than the american style. But I hope you get something useful from these ideas that help you improve your site.
Dale Dugas wrote:Gary,
http://www.bullshido.net/forums/showthread.php?t=117840
seems you want to drive some traffic to your site.
No offense but what is your background?
Your lineage is not listed but you want people to shell out money for material that is extremely questionable.
In the past I bought Shifu Marcus Brinkman material from you. That was good material.
Be careful of trying to come across as being better trained than you actually are.
kreese wrote:Dale Dugas wrote:Gary,
http://www.bullshido.net/forums/showthread.php?t=117840
seems you want to drive some traffic to your site.
No offense but what is your background?
Your lineage is not listed but you want people to shell out money for material that is extremely questionable.
In the past I bought Shifu Marcus Brinkman material from you. That was good material.
Be careful of trying to come across as being better trained than you actually are.
Wonder if Marcus sees any money from the sales of the DVDs produced with Gary. Before that, there was just Earl Montague to claim as lineage. Now we've invented new martial arts, and have even gone so far as to revise that new martial art.
Having trained personally with Marcus and viewed some of his materials, I am willing to bet that Flowing Combat is just a plagiarized version of Gao xingyi and bagua, with dim mak (taijiquan is dim mak, you see) as the strong foundation.
We shouldn't support this sort of disrespect and profit-motivated products that just put a bow on stolen material and call it something else.
kreese wrote:Well now that you agree with me completely, since you can't possibly disagree with my first-hand account, anything you say will just be double-speak to try to pretend like you aren't what you are.
kreese wrote: you an aspiring attorney, by chance? An aspiring professional liar?
kreese wrote: fact, it will be fun to read things like "hybrid of TCC, XYC, BGZ, LHBF, Military Unarmed Combat, and dim mak.
kreese wrote:, that's an irresistable combination of arts that you are proficient in.
kreese wrote: am familiar with Choi Wai Lun's LHBF and have met Drake several times, along with some of his gong fu family. While there are certainly many expressions of the art, Choi's school is probably the only one that has a fighting lineage and still emphasizes usage.
So I guess if I go to your website I'll see some clips of your LHBF, unless you've already done so here? You probably have, that would be the smart marketing decision. I have an idea of what to look for, as I've watched hundreds of hours of Choi and his students trying to decode his art. It took a long time after I saw and felt it to really start to grasp what it was about, so kudos to you for having become proficient in that one in the relatively brief period of time since Flowing Combat 1.0.
kreese wrote:, you exposed yourself, and feel free to continue doing what you're doing, viva capitalism and all that. But please get it the fuck out of here, it's just retarded and designed to be deceptive.
kreese wrote: sure you have covered yourself from a legal point of view, much like Brian stole Emptyflower from the late David DeVere, the guy who provided the venue and audience for your marketing, which I'm sure you're glad split into two boards, more advertising space for you.
kreese wrote: from now on no one will take you seriously, and certainly someone who has taken advantage of one of the most knowledgeable and experienced members of the board will promptly be banned and we'll also say a bunch of mean things about you, because you won't be able to write back.
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